[Nfd-dev] comments for the nfd doc

[Ilya Moiseenko]

I’ve read first 22 pages, here are my corrections/suggestions.
Will send the rest tomorrow.

Page 4
“diverse experimentation of NDN technology” of -> with
“These include hash computation routines, DNS resolver” DNS resolver ??
“different lower level transport mechanisms” various lower level transports
“StrategyChoice” Strategy Choice Table (SCT)

Page 6
“a local endpoint and a peer” ?? What is a local endpoint? Text should be more clear: 1) node to node, 2) app to node, 3) node to broadcast medium

Page 7
“When a peer makes a connection to a local endpoint” ? When local app connects to its face? Writing is obscure, because previously peer was defined as an app or a node, but node can connect only to remote endpoints. 

Page 10
“return value is a FIB entry that”  that -> such that
“and remove NextHop” -> removes
“The FIB is updated only through management. FIB manager (Section 6.1.1) is directly responsible for updating the FIB.” Both sentences have the same meaning. Remove one.
“configured by operation” ?? you mean manually ?

Page 13
"collection of PIT entries which that “  which or that pick one

Page 15
“StrategyChoice” Strategy Choice = common name inconsistency 

Page 17
“loopup/insertion” lookup
“FIB/PIT/StrategyChoice/Measurement” -> does not fit by width, replace / with ,
“full enumerate” full enumeration
“partial enumerate” partial enumeration

Page 19
“ContentStore” Content Store

Page 20
"first step after entring” entering
"ContentStore “  Content Store

Ilya

On Jun 19, 2014, at 1:40 AM, Beichuan Zhang <bzhang at cs.ARIZONA.EDU> wrote:

> Hi,
> 
> We’ve been integrating the text of the NFD Developer’s Guide, and now it is in the final stage. Can everyone read the document or part of it, and email in comments? Any comment would be appreciated. We plan to finish it by the end of Sunday.
> 
> The current PDF is attached. If you want the latest version, the repository is git at git.irl.cs.ucla.edu:papers/nfd-docs.git.
> 
> Thanks,
> 
> Beichuan
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