<html><head><meta http-equiv="Content-Type" content="text/html charset=windows-1252"></head><body style="word-wrap: break-word; -webkit-nbsp-mode: space; -webkit-line-break: after-white-space;"><div>Ive read first 22 pages, here are my corrections/suggestions.</div><div>Will send the rest tomorrow.</div><div><br></div><div>Page 4</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">diverse experimentation of NDN technology</span> of -> with</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">These include hash computation routines, </span><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">DNS resolver</span> DNS resolver ??</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">different lower level transport mechanisms</span> various lower level transports</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">Strat</span><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">egyChoice</span> Strategy Choice Table (SCT)</div><div><br></div><div>Page 6</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">a local
endpoint and a peer</span> ?? What is a local endpoint? Text should be more clear: 1) node to node, 2) app to node, 3) node to broadcast medium</div><div><br></div><div>Page 7</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">When a peer makes a connection to a local endpoint</span> ? When local app connects to its face? Writing is obscure, because previously peer was defined as an app or a node, but node can connect only to remote endpoints. </div><div><br></div><div>Page 10</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">return value is a FIB entry that</span> that -> such that</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">and remove NextHop</span> -> removes</div><div><span style="font-size: 10pt; font-family: CMR10;">The FIB is updated only through management. FIB manager (Section </span><span style="font-size: 10pt; font-family: CMR10; color: rgb(166, 24, 21);">6.1.1</span><span style="font-size: 10pt; font-family: CMR10;">) is directly responsible for updating the FIB.</span> Both sentences have the same meaning. Remove one.</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">configured
by operation</span> ?? you mean manually ?</div><div><br></div><div>Page 13</div><div>"<span style="font-size: 10pt; font-family: CMR10;">collection of PIT entries which that </span> which or that pick one</div><div><br></div>Page 15<div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">StrategyChoice</span> Strategy Choice = common name inconsistency </div><div><br></div><div>Page 17</div><div><span style="font-family: CMBX10; font-size: 10pt;">loopup/insertion</span> lookup</div><div><span style="font-family: CMR10; font-size: 10pt;">FIB/PIT/StrategyChoice/Measurement</span> -> does not fit by width, replace / with ,</div><div><span style="font-family: CMBX10; font-size: 10pt;">full enumerate</span> full enumeration</div><div><span style="font-family: CMBX10; font-size: 10pt;">partial enumerate</span> partial enumeration</div><div><br></div><div>Page 19</div><div>ContentStore Content Store</div><div><br></div><div>Page 20</div><div>"<span style="font-size: 10pt; font-family: CMR10;">first step after </span><font face="CMR10" size="2">entring</font><font face="CMSY10" size="2"></font> entering</div><div>"<span style="font-size: 10pt; font-family: CMR10;">ContentStore </span><font face="CMSY10" size="2"> </font> Content Store</div><div><br></div><div>Ilya</div><div><br></div><div><div><div>On Jun 19, 2014, at 1:40 AM, Beichuan Zhang <<a href="mailto:bzhang@cs.ARIZONA.EDU">bzhang@cs.ARIZONA.EDU</a>> wrote:</div><br class="Apple-interchange-newline"><blockquote type="cite">Hi,<br><br>Weve been integrating the text of the NFD Developers Guide, and now it is in the final stage. Can everyone read the document or part of it, and email in comments? Any comment would be appreciated. We plan to finish it by the end of Sunday.<br><br>The current PDF is attached. If you want the latest version, the repository is git@git.irl.cs.ucla.edu:papers/nfd-docs.git.<br><br>Thanks,<br><br>Beichuan<br><br><span><nfd-docs.pdf></span>_______________________________________________<br>Nfd-dev mailing list<br><a href="mailto:Nfd-dev@lists.cs.ucla.edu">Nfd-dev@lists.cs.ucla.edu</a><br>http://www.lists.cs.ucla.edu/mailman/listinfo/nfd-dev<br></blockquote></div><br></div></body></html>